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Substitute Quickly ------edit still
Second hand
man woman
hubby or wife
all need a replacement early
a car
a cart
Audi
or
Cadilac
even a micro and drier
when all pack
the only answer is
to just em sack...
buy afresh
or
change
with your purse
cut your cloth
with new scissors
according to its worth
then
then
lay down flat ...
buttons open
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Change when its a must
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2023-01-07 12:40
After...
replacing two wives, I find that the one I have now is quite enough to keep me going.
I don't think I could keep up with a newer model, besides who wants to train another one?
~ Geez.
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lovedly
Sat, 2023-01-07 12:55
Ha ha Gee
while just composing this I did not at all have u in my mind I knew all
thnx friend
Lavender
Sat, 2023-01-07 17:21
Substitute...
carefully, to be sure - if at all. I'm determined to live with less "stuff."
Nice, Lovedly!
L
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-01-07 19:11
Upgrades
Lol. I use it until it’s broken beyond repair. I buy new things of course. My cheaper imported guitars record as many songs as the pricey American ones. Our fancy coffee machine was hundreds of dollars and it pooped out in a few years. The old crusty one it replaced has regained its former heavyweight title.
Tim
lovedly
Sun, 2023-01-08 01:30
GREAT
MEMENTOS
TIM
SING
Seren
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:54
Dear Loved
This really needs some work hon; it needs to have the ha-ha & lol removed at the end you know Jess would savage you for that ;) maybe?
cut your cloth
with new scissors
according to its worth
then laydown (or something) with a laugh
I used laydown as an example as always this is your poem, I want it to be YOU though!
love and biggest hugs J xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
lovedly
Tue, 2023-01-10 12:59
Thank you wil do
Seren you still read me
as did once jess
I will amend
Seren
Tue, 2023-01-10 13:09
Now & Always
I actually like what you've done ;)
the ha-ha & lol took away from it Imo,
I'll see you tomorrow loved
Love and biggest hugs J xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
lovedly
Wed, 2023-01-11 00:26
tomorrow here has come
how about urs
friendly aussie