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Unwellness Today
an exciting poem
shall post next day
I may only if...

I just woke up at midnight
many read it
but no comment
so out of bed
now I said

read my poem this
tomorrow may,
may not be for me
then y'all feel sad
the poet swept
without a sigh
you could have just said poet....

Doc extended said
not yet ten days rest in bed

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


This poem has a strong sense of emotion that is effectively communicated through the use of personal imagery and a conversational tone. The rhyme scheme and the use of repetition help to create a cohesive structure that flows nicely. The imagery of waking up in the middle of the night and being swept away without a sigh create a powerful image of loneliness and despair. However, the last line of the poem, "you could have just said poet Good Bye," could be improved by changing it to "you could have just said, 'Good Bye, poet.'" This change provides a more direct reference to the speaker and more effectively communicates their sadness at the lack of recognition for their work. Overall, this poem is an effective expression of emotion and is a great example of how poetic form can be used to communicate powerful messages

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author comment

u too get well soon..........

author comment

Hello, Lovedly,
Be well!

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