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Submitted by lovedly on Wed, 2022-08-31 22:00

She came for a moment
a fleeting one
just to give me energy

Divine
she was drunk by my eyes
and like wine dissolved
into the universe
in a momentous moment

gave me the fruits of joy
men need most
of an intent
to creativity
a beautiful content
then in the eyes of god
she merged after that
monumentous moment...

devoid of all love and emotion
she did vanish
why did she have to come
a truthful heart
a soul banish

heaven alone knows
why so!
lovely poet she was

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Triskelion

Thu, 2022-09-01 01:42

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..lovedly. I think others will understand now why your writing is so inspirational. Your second stanza is pure poetry. The ending left me wondering.
One of your best!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Thu, 2022-09-01 11:42

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YOU ARE SO NICE
at least you raise my morale
and
so make me feel
time as well spent

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-09-01 09:21

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best I've seen from you in a while. Nothing I could find to criticize. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

lovedly

Thu, 2022-09-01 17:49

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did u read me thanks brilliance of 2013.....all for neopoetreeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-09-01 13:08

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You're indeed married to your muse. This is amazing creation. The beautiful rhythmic sweetness of the words brings an aesthetic to the reader's perspective in the poetic description of your mind.

Nice job!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Lavender

Thu, 2022-09-01 19:40

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Hello, Lovedly,
Beautiful poetry and elegant language!
"lovely poet she was." Perfect ending.
L

lovedly

Thu, 2022-09-01 19:43

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Where have you been
long tyme
NO
C
HOPE ALL WELL
B

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-09-01 19:50

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I am well! I hope you are, too!
L

lovedly

Thu, 2022-09-01 20:57

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yes well

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