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An autumn leaf

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2022-08-19 23:15

Be not alone
all are lonely,

somewhere in the vastness of eternity
someone calls out instantly
still we say wait
time hasn't come yet
then the loneliness vanishes

the unknown comes in one’s dreams
and screams
where have you been

are you now asking
an autumn leaf

the invisible one smiles alongside
now 'tis autumn
there is no surprise
hope you too will be
some day
flying about
side beside

Ah an autumn leaf falls

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sat, 2022-08-20 21:19

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are sure to fall, but I'm not worried yet. I didn't learn my lesson from the grasshopper that played all summer and didn't put anything away like the ants. I'm going to play all the rest of the summer. Humph! People talking about fall already! Yeah, I love Halloween too! But we still have at least 5-6 weeks before fall. Summmmmmmeer, going out in your shirtsleeves, shorts and sandals, [no socks]! Ugh! Not having to struggle into those heavy coats and boots! WTF is wrong with you people!? ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sat, 2022-08-20 21:54

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WHY Such a Rage
from sweet sugar mouthed as always
Gee .
Something wrong with me
may be .
I often compose poems all about autumn
once compared an autumn tree with a woman
many liked it

Perhaps you did too
Relax Autumn will creep in slowly as squirrels do in my back yard and public garden
Till then excuse me
Geez

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-08-21 11:34

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being what I thought, funny in a sarcastic way. I never meant for you to take it seriously! I still love lovedly.
Sheesh! ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sun, 2022-08-21 12:50

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normally sarcastic
But u r not
anyway I love to read your views
it is like renovating my mind
afresh look at a colorful strewn leaf
may not be autumn's
Gee

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Triskelion

Sat, 2022-08-20 23:49

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always puts me in the moment, lovedly. Although I care less for free verse, all of your writing carries that same quality that continues to intrigue and inspire me.

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Sun, 2022-08-21 18:15

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quality is what one wants entire
I only endeavor

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Triskelion

Wed, 2022-08-24 03:13

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to know that your writing inspires? It's live in the moment quality and eclectic arrangement is like shards of crystal thoughts of endless colours. When I read your work, it expands the horizon of my own thoughts.
Anyway, skill and quality isn't really appreciated any more. Appreciation for most readers nowadays is choresome and tedious.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

lovedly

Wed, 2022-08-24 13:11

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your analysis thrills me kind thanks do appreciate all not only me...

an autumn leaf last year's
now buried in clay......

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