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Value Time
Value Time
Time is that something
man has created
by inventing a clock
to track the motion
of the sun
but all of us
fall short of it mostly
we all simply
whine, go here and there
to dance and dine
then we define
time yours you spent
money mine
now for your smaller pleasures
I have none
I'm very busy
for you I have
just no more of my
invaluable time
don't weep as I sleep
said she
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-07-19 03:01
dear Lovedly,
have a refreshing rest period.
*Love, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lovedly
Tue, 2022-07-19 15:48
hi Cats hope ur better
off with migraines
what does dentist say
DENTURES may be
but wow costly
yes can't help it
how else to eat
Geezer
Tue, 2022-07-19 09:37
Resting well...
is the key, she said,
So don't think, you're in my head
I'll have time to rest when I'm dead
Good work, but still deadly. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Tue, 2022-07-19 11:23
Good work, but still deadly
GEE glad u b it's not like deathly no RIP yet lol
Geezer
Tue, 2022-07-19 13:20
glad to hear...
continue to be heard. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Ray Whitaker
Tue, 2022-07-26 12:33
Invaluable times
Every breath drawn is invaluable….
The older I get, the more I feel it
Your poem here is an enjoyable read…
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lovedly
Tue, 2022-07-26 14:04
enjoy
what is the mission of a prolific poet
but to help others
N J O Y
pull em out of mind's deepest graves
let them know
TIME
has different waves
many learn to surf
even in time's
RIVERS
and this is
LIFE