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Value Time

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2022-07-18 23:09

Value Time
Time is that something
man has created
by inventing a clock
to track the motion
of the sun

but all of us
fall short of it mostly
we all simply
whine, go here and there
to dance and dine
then we define
time yours you spent
money mine

now for your smaller pleasures
I have none
I'm very busy
for you I have
just no more of my
invaluable time
don't weep as I sleep
said she

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-07-19 03:01

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have a refreshing rest period.

*Love, Cat

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-07-19 15:48

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off with migraines
what does dentist say
DENTURES may be
but wow costly
yes can't help it
how else to eat

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-07-19 09:37

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is the key, she said,
So don't think, you're in my head
I'll have time to rest when I'm dead

Good work, but still deadly. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Tue, 2022-07-19 11:23

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GEE glad u b it's not like deathly no RIP yet lol

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-07-19 13:20

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continue to be heard. ~ Geez.
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Ray Whitaker

Tue, 2022-07-26 12:33

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Every breath drawn is invaluable….

The older I get, the more I feel it

Your poem here is an enjoyable read…

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-07-26 14:04

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what is the mission of a prolific poet
but to help others
N J O Y
pull em out of mind's deepest graves
let them know
TIME
has different waves
many learn to surf
even in time's
RIVERS
and this is
LIFE

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