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ONLY THREE CHOICES...EDIT

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2022-10-14 23:42

Each one of us
in life has three choices
but we all need to exercise one only

Either give in fully
give up totally
finally
fight with all your might
win or fail
let it be immaterial

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Sat, 2022-10-15 10:07

Some wise words...

from an elder. Hmmm, I would delete the [else, and just make it give in totally] Either give in fully
.give up totally
finally
. fight with all your might
~ Geez.
.

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lovedly

Sat, 2022-10-15 11:50

Thanks GEE

Shall see

author comment

Rosewood Apothecary

Sat, 2022-10-15 20:02

I love this. I’m crying a little. This is hard to see from where I am in my life. Between these kids and the dog and all the running around, I’m basically just driving around half numb or completely sobbing. Every day is a fight and today the fight was extra long and fairly brutal. I really needed to read this tonight, at that particular time. It needed to be “immaterial “.

“Poetry is more about learning…” touché.

Spectacular,
Tim

lovedly

Sun, 2022-10-16 13:00

WOW

I didn't expect
to
make you sob
nor other's
love rob
LOL
ha
HA Thanks
wipe your tears
these are true materials
friend

tissue....

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Lavender

Mon, 2022-10-17 09:46