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NIAGARA FALLS

I only wish you had been to Niagara
romance never ends there ever,
I would love to have one each day
come what may winter spring or snow
Niagara always does sweet love grow

upon my life’s arc
there is a permanent glow
how I wish all of you
sooner than later to Niagara go
make the most beautiful
of all God's presentations of love
naturally within you flow

now stop short
you hearts palpitate
take a car
a flight right away
stay at any lovely
Niagara fall's over looking place
do stay
your romance will bloom
that’s what one can surely say.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

Maybe it is the rush of the water, that gives the feeling of sexual gratification? At any rate, yes, it is a beautiful part of our natural scene. We share it with Canada and I can't say which side is the more beautiful! I'm sure that there will be a lot of people that will go to the "Falls" and think; "Maybe I can get my groove back". Rhyme from Lovedly? Hmmmmm. ~ Geezer.
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I really love those first two lines. They do a wonderful job of stating the thesis of the poem, but also intriguing the reader to read on. Line 4 seems a bit redundant with both winter and snow but I like the couplet from 4-5 a lot. Possibly a comma after "you hearts" [14]? overall a really strong poem, and a very enjoyable read

punctuate as and where
I leave it to old timers
breathless readers

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ere NIAGARA SOLIDIFIES
NOW it snows
heaviky

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