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How does time fly
How does time fly
without any wings
no wind
no sails of cotton
nothing
yet they all say
time flies
isn't it an anomaly
even birds with broken wings can't fly
what uniqueness
God has shown me
Time flies without wings
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2023-03-04 14:04
I find that...
this theme is good, but the whole of it is lost because
of a couple of things. The bales of cotton have nothing to do
with flying, and you have a double negative, in [no nothing].
You also have a typo in "even birds with broken [rings] can't fly
[What] uniqueness
You might fix the cotton bales flying by saying:
[no sails of cotton]
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
lovedly
Tue, 2023-03-07 10:42
Howz it now
Gee
thnx
Geezer
Wed, 2023-03-08 07:07
I love it...
Nicely done, lovedly. You have made this piece great. I detect a newness about you. Tell me I'm wrong, I dare you. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
lovedly
Wed, 2023-03-08 08:59
GEE
You only have given life to me how can I dare!
Geezer
Wed, 2023-03-08 09:17
Nay...
I have given you nothing that you did not have. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
lovedly
Wed, 2023-03-08 10:08
Ha ha
don't ever displace...lol
Ekaterina Alexa...
Sat, 2023-03-04 19:26
An interesting concept!
Hi Lovedly, this is an interesting concept and you have written about it well! I think Geezer's suggestion was a good one. Well done Xxx
lovedly
Sun, 2023-03-05 01:10
Thanks EK
I C u hv changed ur dress
Ekaterina Alexa...
Sun, 2023-03-05 03:17
Thanks
Thanks for noticing xx
lovedly
Sun, 2023-03-05 23:37
ha ha
what else can one do
lovedly
Mon, 2023-03-06 07:16
some say Time moves .....why fly ?
What do u have to say to that? poets