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Equalizer Nature...edit

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2020-04-12 09:39

Equalizer Nature

When one is born
is
NUDE
when one is torn
is made
NUDE
but the fact of life
is not to be
CRUDE

When we leave the
Earth
we all are same
uncovered
like at
Birth
Nude

So leave an everlasting while
inevitable print
just one of smile

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Sun, 2020-04-12 11:44

Rula's picture

Loved

If we leave that line before the last, we could get a more universal read

So leave an everlasting while
inevitable print
just one of SMILE
(like Loved does)

ALL THE WHILE

❤❤❤❤❤❤

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........Robert Frost☺

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Sun, 2020-04-12 13:33

lovedly's picture

Thanks Rula

your are always apt
thanks done

author comment

Sun, 2020-04-12 11:54

Geezer's picture

I guess...

that is one way to say that as we come into this world bereft of clothes and naked, we should go out the same way; wearing nothing but a smile. ~ Geezer.
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Sun, 2020-04-12 16:03

lovedly

I would use the word nude one more time after--- uncovered like at birth
there is something oddly eerie about this poem I like it very much

Chrys

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