is try not to force the rhyme. the syntax of the speech needs to flow, and flowing from low to high language make it feel forced. too obvious with rhyme, try to hide them with enjambment- continuing the line in to the next without a pause... so you don't end the line with a completed phase, but a phrase that leads you on to the next line without a pause so the rhyme gets blended in the reading.
Most rap in forced. But it works because rhymes repeated within the lines and all over the place to create a kind of music. The lines here are a bit sing-songy, you can make the lines more interesting.

good on this one, just try making it a little smoother. Give it another try! Just suggestions, but try shortening up some lines, like this:

Autumn plans reversed out of reach
away from the heat of sandy beach
My desire travels to a cold and hard city
Snow in great Canada, oh what a pity!

~ Geezer.

I agree with Gee, it is late I skip read your piece, just a few small edits, and this will be a good second to my first lol.
Yours as always Ian ..

With the others. It's a nice piece but the rhyme does seem to be pushed a bit. relax. loosen up and have fun when you write! I enjoyed it.