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sometimes I feel
This world has more
than many trees
mostly are visited by bees
few like you and me
love the forest breeze
so come and reach out to me also
if you please.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
alidzain
Sun, 2016-05-01 17:28
yap
I used to feel like that too.
Alid
lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-02 10:31
hi
we all are also tall
NEOPOET
poetrees
well done for acceptance
lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-02 10:33
HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII
we all are also tall
NEOPOET
poetrees
well done for acceptance
Sparrow
Sun, 2016-05-01 18:35
Loved
There you are, in the same sphere as us, so take time to look with think at those that are there with you.
In that vast space you will be able to touch eternity, yet your friends will still be close,
Yours as always Ian..
.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Mon, 2016-05-02 10:30
Ian and Alidz
we all are also tall poetrees
well done for acceptance
weirdelf
Tue, 2016-05-03 06:17
Frankly, my dear lovedly, a bit trite
but nice, don't we all? Simple and quite love(d)ly.
Why the comma in the second line?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
lovedly
Tue, 2016-05-03 13:51
which second line
Can't see a comma
unless my cataract
has really become worse.
Sparrow
Tue, 2016-05-03 18:39
Loved
You should have gone to spec savers LOL
Jess is spot on..
Yours Ian..
.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
lovedly
Tue, 2016-05-03 22:00
well Ian
One step at a time
One step more we climb
a step missed
we may fall and go blind
but never mind
to try to learn
do well is wont of mankind
some are blessed with kindness
some end up with physical blindness,
yet learn what lies
beyond the beyond
of knowledge attainment
we all should be fond....
weirdelf
Wed, 2016-05-04 04:23
the second line
than many, trees
than many[COMMA] trees
see it now?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
lovedly
Wed, 2016-05-04 21:48
thanks a lot
Jess
my eyes cataract
softens vision
corrected since
lovedly
Fri, 2017-07-07 21:54
reliving olden times
new comers have a freedom
slice me if not seldom
weirdelf
Sat, 2017-07-08 00:08
If I seem a pedant and an utter bastard at times
It's because I am.
I give you a harder time than most because you are capable of so much if you would just, dare I say, practice more quality rather than quantity.
I gave you a very nasty time recently over a certain workshop because people there were trying their best to grapple with difficult concepts and you seemed to come in just seeking attention, distracting and wasting their time. I can't honestly apologise for being mean to you but I can honestly welcome you to any workshop if you will just please, please read and follow the process and SPEAK IN PLAIN ENGLISH FOR FUCKS SAKE. ok?
kisskiss
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
lovedly
Sat, 2017-07-08 12:11
the dying flame/one can do but nothing except
BOW I N G
to you jess
shall follow you seriously now
more than ever
my clock time's
is approaching !
faster now
than ever before
I still
will
B O W