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sometimes I feel

This world has more
than many trees
mostly are visited by bees

few like you and me
love the forest breeze
so come and reach out to me also
if you please.

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I used to feel like that too.

Alid

we all are also tall
NEOPOET
poetrees
well done for acceptance

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we all are also tall
NEOPOET
poetrees
well done for acceptance

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There you are, in the same sphere as us, so take time to look with think at those that are there with you.
In that vast space you will be able to touch eternity, yet your friends will still be close,
Yours as always Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

we all are also tall poetrees
well done for acceptance

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but nice, don't we all? Simple and quite love(d)ly.
Why the comma in the second line?

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Can't see a comma
unless my cataract
has really become worse.

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You should have gone to spec savers LOL
Jess is spot on..
Yours Ian..

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

One step at a time

One step more we climb
a step missed
we may fall and go blind
but never mind
to try to learn
do well is wont of mankind
some are blessed with kindness
some end up with physical blindness,
yet learn what lies
beyond the beyond
of knowledge attainment
we all should be fond....

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than many, trees
than many[COMMA] trees

see it now?

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Jess
my eyes cataract
softens vision
corrected since

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new comers have a freedom
slice me if not seldom

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It's because I am.
I give you a harder time than most because you are capable of so much if you would just, dare I say, practice more quality rather than quantity.

I gave you a very nasty time recently over a certain workshop because people there were trying their best to grapple with difficult concepts and you seemed to come in just seeking attention, distracting and wasting their time. I can't honestly apologise for being mean to you but I can honestly welcome you to any workshop if you will just please, please read and follow the process and SPEAK IN PLAIN ENGLISH FOR FUCKS SAKE. ok?
kisskiss

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

BOW I N G
to you jess
shall follow you seriously now
more than ever

my clock time's
is approaching !
faster now
than ever before
I still
will
B O W

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