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me rose

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2016-12-06 18:42

we all compose praises
yes of roses only
why
not as roses are red
but in existence
and
till space's
distance
roses do not die

in library books
they still survive
and
then only these eros roses
bring back
sleepy hidden memories alive
roses in no case die

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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swamp-witch

Mon, 2017-03-20 13:21

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Love the sound of that, loved.

I think the idea you are proposing here is very important. Our ideas of love, our icons that represent love, will last forever. Even if an actual rose withers, the symbol of a red rose for love will last through the generations. The act of giving a rose will still mean something special.

You've marked this as a rough draft. If you want, you can let me know where you want to accomplish with it or what you think needs changing and I could give some ideas!

Kelsey

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lovedly

Tue, 2017-03-21 07:45

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I only compose
off the cuff and leave it to my well wishers
to polish it up or advise

I leave it you
as you are an upcoming poet
now all know
so thanks to you
lady young poet

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