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with love to Shakespeare

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2016-07-15 19:21

Recalling Shakespeare......
''''''''''why expect, as expectations cause disaster ....’’’

So all genuine poets compose
only like Niagara
it falls, even though none bathe below
we all know...
but
like a RIVER called
Life
it does continue to flow
so do words of aged,
Okay,
Experienced, ones all know...

Let words flow
and as all say
in dust merge
we all in the mist of darkness
finally submerge
but
that is no cause for us
not to emerge

With words our inner voice
does share
and
that’s our choice
very much through our
deliberations, to rejoice
so all continue to compose poetry
Regardless

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Sat, 2016-07-16 03:35

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Once again a repeat of a comment written.
Good points though, but needs to be a poetic shout.
The form of free verse is OK, I am waiting for a self made poem from you on some aspect of life or nature seldom attempted to make it your own..
This is a good work,
Yours Ian..

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lovedly

Sat, 2016-07-16 05:19

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at present I am in circles NIAGARA MIST
too much burden
poetry in background
shall as soon as i get a respite

any topic u suggest
say now Ian
bard
me ////UUUU

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lovedly

Sat, 2016-07-16 11:11

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Of supreme Kindness

Kindness is a thing divine
do accept good wishes of mine
we all are but small features sublime
though in whimsical attitude we resign.

You are far away in the Far East
where people meet
while here we are in a lurch
who are always, in constant search
of an identity!
Yet
you say you are a solitary star,
far, very far
thus we all still want to be
a symbol of diverse humanity,
you and the entire world apart
all human beings are a mysterious part
of a world so diverse
as know ye
time’s minuscule strewn beads are we.

Yes all of us strung
in a monumental fashion,
wanting immortal recognition,
yes here it’s really wanting!

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lovedly

Sat, 2016-07-16 13:15

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A belief is absolutely personal

You Sir
are the wisest of men
knowledgeable, humble and simple
I d' like to bow
to be blessed by you

I am a simple poet
of frugal beginnings,
all must start
at the lower wrung of the ladder
scrub the ship
wash dishes
labour, carry stones
then alone
you will know
what strength lies in your bones

more than minerals
it's the will
God may be
but you are still
the emblem
the epitome
of servility

May God
your god
Bless thee

you are like petrichor!

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lovedly

Sat, 2016-07-16 14:15

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Sure enough
Change is the only
Constant
in existence

so you must also change with times
don't you also dress accordingly?

in winter, warm clothes

in snow, snow clothing

in spring you start to strip

and

summers wear nothings
once on the beach
all beseech
and nudity in the
ocean,
sea,
river,
you seek
don't others then only at you peek!

AS ELVIS STILL SEEMINGLY SINGS!!!!!

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Sparrow

Sat, 2016-07-16 19:24

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There in the wordless void came speech,
Then the people drifted apart
They sought new tounges to whisper things,
These new patterns though all knew them
Became another language and the way became clouded

Man sought new fields to walk and other Gods to love
Yet their Gods were weapons of the greedy
They imprisoned the people to their selfish needs.
There in the setting sun a glimpse of our knowledge
Reflected what we had forgotten all those years ago

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lovedly

Sun, 2016-07-17 03:11

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but what about a comment for me
on this shaky's

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Sparrow

Sun, 2016-07-17 18:22

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if you look up a bit you will see I commented on this one, this is just an extra for you , Take care and read all your comments lol, Yours Ian..

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weirdelf

Thu, 2016-07-21 11:36

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in your own verse?
No doubt the Bard wrote a lot of crap but he didn't spray it about like a Niagara of diarrhoea.
I won't even look for the gems in this unless you change the title or make it more reverential and less self-referential.

cheers,
Jess
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lovedly

Mon, 2016-08-01 18:19

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weirdelf

Thu, 2016-07-21 14:25

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you figure out why this poem pissed me off so much and you try to fix it.
A hint. The Bard no doubt wrote a lot more than he ever published.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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lovedly

Fri, 2016-07-22 00:08

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Shakespeare had said
‘’ I always feel happy, you know why?

Because I don't expect anything from anyone, Expectations always hurt...

Life is short... So love your life... Be happy... And Keep smiling... Just Live for yourself and Before you speak, Listen Before you write, Think Before you spend, Earn Before you pray, Forgive Before you hurt, Feel Before you hate, Love Before you quit, Try Before you die.’’

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lovedly

Fri, 2016-07-22 00:05

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a bit busy yet
say a week later
will be okay
thanks

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