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Love me O Dawn

my Love
in the moonlight
I see your sparkling face
recollect your charming smile

where can anyone ever trace
love so tender
except in your romance

the candle light flickers tonight
all fire burns me
like a forest

champagne we shall have
enjoy some water of coconut
candy served with tea

when I think of you
so modest
love and my heart shall rejoice
tenderness and tears
would be your choice
Dawn

there can be no intrusion
but
TO BE CONTINUED AS PART SECOND

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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IN TWO PARTS NEO EDITOR ADVISED Therefore the but...
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the candle light flickers tonight
all fire burns me
like a forest

exquisite!!! waiting on pt# 2

*hugs, Cat

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will do!

*hugs, (the) Cat

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to continue loving dawn 10 hours more

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This is beautifully crafted poem. I just admire the whole lines. I adore your literary mind.

Nice written poem!

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

GEE must be busy
keep waiting ten hours
neos hold is 23 hours

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DAWN HAS ALSO BEEN POSTED DO read this FIRST enjoy the fullest A long lost maiden love Where is DAWN she comes every day You see her only if you are awake She makes everyone's day Yours too may

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