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Klonopin!

Someone sent a savior
just to comfort me

It wasn't God nor angels,
but it held a firm decree.

The measure of the blessing
was clear for all to see.

The effect of pharmaceuticals
reached my biology!

No longer would I suffer
with extreme anxiety!

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses a combination of rhyme and rhythm to convey its message. The use of the term "savior" in the first stanza sets up an expectation of a religious or spiritual theme, which is then subverted in the fourth stanza with the introduction of the "pharmaceuticals" theme. This could be interpreted as a commentary on the reliance on medication in modern society.

The poem maintains a consistent ABAB rhyme scheme throughout, which contributes to its rhythmic flow. However, the meter is inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow and make the poem less engaging to read. The poet might consider revising the poem to establish a consistent meter.

The use of the term "biology" in the fourth stanza is a bit vague. If the poet is referring to a specific biological process or effect, they might consider using more specific language to convey this. Similarly, the term "abject anxiety" in the final stanza could be replaced with a more specific description of the speaker's experience with anxiety.

The poem's theme of relief from anxiety through medication is clear and effectively conveyed. However, the poet might consider exploring this theme in more depth, perhaps by describing the speaker's experience before and after taking the medication, or by exploring the societal implications of the reliance on medication for mental health issues.

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many years ago my Dr. put me on Klonopin and Anafrinal (sp?) It did not agree with me. But I am glad that it has worked for you. I went through a trial of a few meds before they got it right. I like your poem, it is a clear and concise declaration of freedom!

*hugs, Cat

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THANKS FOR COMMENTING IT MEANS ALOT. I KNOW THAT YOU UNDERSTAND.

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

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This was a really good poem and your rhyme scheme is excellent. I can see the improvements you've made over the past few months. Well done, I'm glad you're feeling less anxiety. Ruby :) xx

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

The flow and rhyme was on point. My son used to take Klonopin and found it helpful..glad you were able to find relief for your symptoms.

~RoseBlack~

IT WAS EITHER THAT OR TAKE MORE DRASTIC MEASURES!

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

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THANKS FOR THE SUPPORT!

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

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Hello, Leslie,
I can feel the relief and appreciation for medicine that helps make life better and more enjoyable. I'm also glad it's available and doing its job for you.
Thank you, Leslie!
L

THANK YOU! YOU ARE A KIND SOUL.

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

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