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Cacophany!

Submitted by Leslie on Thu, 2024-08-29 14:19

Blood red sky,
people crying tonight
Gun shots sounding,
innocents die

Tenement buildings
crash to the ground
Mercenaries fighting
your soul's compromised

Your city will burn
and history will turn
If it's peace we desire
there are lessons to cite

listen to your brother
try not to be right
You may just discover
healing tonight!.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Is the internal logic consistent?

Last few words:

I wrote this out of depression and desperation. This is what is coming at us. If we cannot learn the art of listeing and giving. We're as good as dead!

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Contest:

Peace Versus War

Content level:

Not Explicit Content