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human beings at times are

human beings at times are

worse than animals
develop their balls faster than changing Falls
A place called NIAGARA HERE
has a significant fall

so all over the world i have seen
kids being squashed as orange balls
Once in the far East
a kid came to a tourist
and clearly
said for 2 dollars .....a booze
you can snooze
and
forget all the gals they couldn't be worse .........
As you'd say ee Cumming is coming .....

The drugist took a dose and burst out his liquid dose
sans
was when he discovered his last ten dollars
others istill in Q .........
would you believe this way are born dicks blue.....
I used ellipses
till they nearly squeezed me here............................

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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Hello, Lovedly!

Hope you are staying well. What a poem! I cannot say that I completely understand its message clearly, but I do feel the energy - some random thoughts that cause one to stop and think. Most of your poetry has a line or two that always stands out to me, and in this poem, it is your final line. "I used ellipses till they nearly squeezed me here..." What a fantastic image. So good!

Thank you!

Lavender

How nice to c u walk thru
I'm FINE

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Human capacities

I wish that I could be a prolific a writer as you appear to be

Your last stanza lost me, tho

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