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THE CHANDELIER
When the CHANDELIER fuses
one remembers
the light that was
and
hopes some day
some one may replace
the beauty
the glamour the charm
that there ever was
The light has gone
the world stepped
into darkness
no Neopoet
condoled
a sad reflection
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Had Ian of UK been here...the world would have instantly known
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Wed, 2021-04-21 20:56
This conveys “missing” and “loss”
Nicely, for such a short piece. A great example of “more is less” in word usage.
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lovedly
Wed, 2021-04-21 21:27
Thank you RW
for your views so soon
lovedly
Thu, 2021-04-22 11:49
Thank you dear RAY
Revised you may refresh perhaps
Ray Whitaker
Thu, 2021-04-22 17:31
Like your revision
I noticed the difference. Who are you missing?
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lovedly
Thu, 2021-04-22 18:29
Hello RW
I am not missing the world is