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PASSIONATE LOVER
Where are you trudging to dear cyclist
turn around my home is not far it's near
the setting sun I am to show you
once a home of warmth
and love
just come in you appear in passion
come move in
see the sun setting
its like the beginning
of a lovely sojourn
enjoy in the finale
tired as you appear to be
come fathom my hospitality
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-05-10 06:30
dear lovedly,
in this line: Where are you trudging to dear cyclist a cyclist would not be trudging (a tern used for walking. he would be peddling)
favorite lines:
its like the beginning
of a lovely sojourn
enjoy in the finale
tired as you appear to be
come fathom my hospitality
I think this is one of your best poems!
*hugs, Cat
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lovedly
Tue, 2022-05-10 13:02
Thanks eagles eyes but
in the prompt
the tired guy is simply walking alongside with his cycle
thanks we all trudge along
few can ride for long
lovedly
Tue, 2022-05-10 15:54
THANKS
I revisited the prompt in time you are right he was riding now i trudge along thanks Cats
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-05-10 15:56
no problem...
that is what Cats are for ;)
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When someone reads your work
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lovedly
Tue, 2022-05-10 18:03
yeah
aha twins
minds