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PASSIONATE LOVER

Submitted by lovedly on Mon, 2022-05-09 23:00

Where are you trudging to dear cyclist
turn around my home is not far it's near
the setting sun I am to show you

once a home of warmth
and love
just come in you appear in passion
come move in
see the sun setting

its like the beginning
of a lovely sojourn
enjoy in the finale
tired as you appear to be
come fathom my hospitality

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-05-10 06:30

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in this line: Where are you trudging to dear cyclist a cyclist would not be trudging (a tern used for walking. he would be peddling)

favorite lines:
its like the beginning
of a lovely sojourn
enjoy in the finale
tired as you appear to be
come fathom my hospitality

I think this is one of your best poems!
*hugs, Cat

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-05-10 13:02

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in the prompt
the tired guy is simply walking alongside with his cycle

thanks we all trudge along
few can ride for long

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-05-10 15:54

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I revisited the prompt in time you are right he was riding now i trudge along thanks Cats

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2022-05-10 15:56

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that is what Cats are for ;)

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lovedly

Tue, 2022-05-10 18:03

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aha twins
minds

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