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Memory of You
what an autumn sky
touched with angel's breath
softer than the snow hiding
'round the next full moon -
endless blue as in your eyes
I hold you heaven bound
beyond the last spent star
there in your hollow home
I am of the deepest dark -
whispering your name
and if I chase my dream
keep your kiss alive on my lips
taste our memories as piquant
autumn allures the willing trees -
I feel your heart
but the seasons chant
I am without harmony
and when my thoughts rejoin
this fickle autumn sky -
you are gone once more
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Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Jackweb
Wed, 2022-11-23 11:36
Great piece here!
Fascination in every line.
Heartfelt conversation!
poignant perception,
Your writing, transformed into an aesthetic character.
Your writing content is touching.
Beautiful rhythmic rendering of words expresses the aesthetic meaning of words in melodious poetic description.
Heart touching feeling of joy.
Sweetness symbolizes emotional feelings in effortless composition.
I left the fascination of good writing for you dear poet.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Lavender
Wed, 2022-11-23 14:04
Hi, Jackweb,
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L
Geezer
Wed, 2022-11-23 20:58
I see...
just one little bobble in this one!
[angel's] breath.
I felt this one was closer to what I was trying to write
than what I had written along the same lines, so I deleted it
and started over! Maybe I'll try again tomorrow. I like it! ~ Geez.
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Lavender
Wed, 2022-11-23 22:22
Hello, Geezer!
Thank you for spotting "angel's" - I'll correct it! Sorry, I don't think I read your poem, but would have liked to. Autumn can stir poignant memories, and this rose to the surface.
Happy Thanksgiving to you and yours!
L
lovedly
Thu, 2022-11-24 00:58
What a delight autumn is
ma'am Lav
I too posted similarly
may scan peacefully
Lavender
Thu, 2022-11-24 10:08
Hello, Lovedly,
Thank you for reading! I will head over to your Autumn poem!
Lav
lovedly
Mon, 2022-11-28 22:12
memorable
waiting Lav poet....
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-11-24 05:28
Those sunrises and sunsets
I can’t imagine the mind of one who isn’t captivated. It’s every day, morning and night here at the lake, it’s pure beauty and mystery…just like that poem up there. Whoa boy you got me this morning, thanksgiving, I’ve just come in from what I can only assume is new moon because the stars are in full orchestra. All their voices sing a song like this…oh muse!!!
Love!
Tim
Lavender
Thu, 2022-11-24 10:12
Hello, Tim,
I agree. The Fall / Winter skis are captivating. They hold such a meditative mood. Thank you for reading and sharing your wonderful thoughts!
Happy Thanksgiving!
L
Eden Guthrie
Thu, 2022-11-24 22:36
I love autumn!
Great poem. I liked the vivid descriptions and how I felt you put a lot of thought into this. Amazinnggg!!!
Lavender
Fri, 2022-11-25 12:06
Hello, Eden,
Thank you so much for reading. I appreciate it!
Lavender
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-11-25 12:20
dearest Lavender,
some people view Autumn as a last hurrah before the end of it all, when Mother nature sleeps. I view it as beauty and a crisp view of nature and a riot of colors. and the night sky is brightly lit with glittering skies. I love to lay out on top of a hill and see the stories in the constellations ;)
*love & hugs, Cat
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Lavender
Fri, 2022-11-25 13:10
Hello, Cat,
Beautiful thought. Yes! The autumn and winter skies have unique moods and feelings so different than spring and summer - all magnificent in their own way. Sometimes the sky, be it any season, brings thoughts and memories of special people to mind. Thank you for reading!
L
Rula
Mon, 2022-11-28 11:39
Dear lavender
I have to say that the very last two stanzas speak volumes to me. I wish I have written anything close to this.
Just gorgeous!
Thank you
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Lavender
Mon, 2022-11-28 12:30
Hello, Rula,
Autumn sometimes makes us pause and reflect on memories of those who are no longer with us. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. I hope you are well!
L
RoseBlack
Mon, 2022-11-28 18:09
Deep thoughts
Underneath an autumn sky! Beautifully written in such an elegant way! Your ability to intertwine language and imagery is superb. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Mon, 2022-11-28 18:19
Hello, RoseBlack!
A little melancholy.
Thank you for reading!
L
Emerald1
Sat, 2022-12-17 10:05
Love the romantic poignancy
Love the romantic poignancy of this , everything ,memories wishes loss all experienced through the stars and heavens and the changing seasons the seasons , it tugged at my heart strings, amazing emotions interwoven with fabulous imagery , a lovely elegant share
Lavender
Sat, 2022-12-17 10:21
Hello, Emerald,
I am so glad you dropped in to visit. Thank you for reading and sharing your lovely thoughts!
L
Seren
Sat, 2023-02-11 20:20
Dear Lavender
It's all been said before I discovered this one.
This a superbly written poem.
Brava!!!
I am going to return tomorrow with a clearer head. I am sure I will enjoy it even more if I am not exhausted lol
Kind regards Jayne
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-11 19:04
Hello, Jayne,
Was fairly deep in thought when this one took shape. I'm so happy you visited and read!
Sincere thanks!
L