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Magic

Submitted by Lavender on Sat, 2024-06-08 23:03

A falling star settled on my rose,
a diamond dipped in velvet clothes.
I dared not touch the pure gift
sent from heaven, so swift,
but let it rest there
in such sweet air
and comply
to my
wish.

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

A rhyming nonet.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Contest:

Neopoet Weekly 06/09/24 to 06/15/24

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

tyro

Sun, 2024-06-09 12:50

yes, it is magic, and pure

yes, it is magic, and pure beauty in a way, that it was not immediately touched, but simply admired for its beauty, brings in into the spiritual realm. Great image here. Fully enjoyed reading it.

Tyro

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Lavender

Sun, 2024-06-09 20:41

Hello, Tyro,

I'm so glad you felt the spiritual essence here, and I'm happy that you enjoyed this!
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.
L

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Rula

Sun, 2024-06-09 13:16

Line two has one beat more to make it a full nonet but it's en easy fix.
The fact that it rhymes makes it a real beauty.
Your magic shows clearly dear Lavender.
Very elegant as always
Thank you for sharing.

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Lavender

Sun, 2024-06-09 20:51

Hello, My Friend!

Thank you for your lovely comments. I'm wondering if you are speaking of the number of syllables in "diamond." Some variants state 3, others state 2 syllables. I myself use 2 syllables: dia-mond. Please let me know if it's something else. I always appreciate your helping me with my work as I know you are a devoted fan of structured poetry.
Thank you, as always!
Lx

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Rula

Mon, 2024-06-10 12:21