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SORCERY.

I should be working now and yet,
My mind goes back to nights of yore;
My fingers freeze against the keys
For all I see or think is her.

She captivates me with her charms,
Seduces me with sensuous moves.
Entices, teases draws me in,
A spider in her web of sin.

And though my heart belongs to her.
And though my soul is not my own
I know,deep deep within that I
Must use strange powers to bring her near.

So many years since I have done
That which I plan now.

Back to my books
Packed deep away
In dust enshrouded cloths,
There to find the magic that
Will bring her to my lust.

When next full moon
Rose petals spread
Soft incense in the air,
Candles red and pink alight
To win my lady fair.

Thrice times I speak,
My name and hers,
Thrice times the candle wax let fall,
Thrice times recite the warlocks words
Then close the spell with ritual deeds.

And she will call me to her side
In darkness shall unite,
There on a bed of passion
Our lust complete the rite.

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I feel that I have eavesdropped on the spell of a sorceror.
I felt the magic and tension in the air, the parting of the veil between reality and fantasy.
The spell complete, I await the result with baited breath. Nothing to contribute,
I feel this is a matter of done. Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thanks for reading. Sorry a bit late responding but getting over something nasty that comes and goes but clearing now.

author comment

...not sure if you're looking for suggestions for this novel piece, but so far, the internal rhymes are catchiest. The metre in S1-L1,2,3 suits the theme best. L4 could start with "For all I..." . It definitely has potential and would make for an entertaining read, especially around Hallowe'en. Couple words I might throw in there would be "cryptic, tome, spell, cast"

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

Thanks for reading and commenting, it's always appreciated. I lean towards parcity when I read and yes, while it would work to start the line with 'For' it would mean getting rid of 'can'. On reading it yet again I like your suggestion more and will edit.
Alex.

author comment

Like the mystical sense of this piece. Maybe something I don't believe in or know much about, but your piece with that title (a totally new for me) draws me in and I like what you have done with it.
Always appreciate sharing your writing

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I don't know much about the subject myself but I have been reading a trilogy of Arthur and Merlin et al and the idea came to me. Thank you. Alex.

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