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Granny Overthere.
When so, so young I had a bear,
Her name was Granny Overthere;
A stranger name could not be found
You've not heard that one I'll be bound.
It came from younger brother Tim
Who, whenever mother asked of him
What did he want with which to play
Would point at Granny and loudly say:
"I want Granny, Granny over there",
She always sat in Father's chair.
Thus it was that she was named
And forever Tim would take the blame.
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paleoray
Tue, 2024-05-21 15:11
A wonderful children poem
As I myself have a strong passion for children's poetry, I have to say that your poem is absolutely wonderful! I love the way you explain how you came about the giving of your Grandmother's name as "Granny Overthere" as a child. Very clever storyline indeed. I have just one critique - In the second line of your last stanza - I think the word "was" should be omitted as I think it is typo. This is simply a marvelous child's poem that should be published. Bravo.
Alex Tanner
Wed, 2024-05-22 13:10
Hello P
Thank you for your kind remarks. The 'was' is not a typo but on re reading it could go as it would tighten things a little more. I try to be economical with words, not always successfully. i will edit it out. Alex
Obadiah Grey
Thu, 2024-05-23 11:14
This is where it begins, Alex
This is where it begins, Alex, As you know.
Charming!
Obi.
Lavender
Thu, 2024-05-30 08:15
Granny Overthere
Hello, Alex,
This affectionate poem will stay with me. Brings back many fond memories of my own. Really enjoyed this!
Thank you,
L
Words Ablaze
Mon, 2024-09-16 09:56
Poor Tim.
Poor Tim.
This is a wonderful piece of work.