The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively uses imagery and metaphor to convey the experience of living with depression. The metaphor of a 'thief of joy' is a strong and evocative image, and the transition from 'happiness to hopeless' and 'wealthy to worthless' effectively communicates the emotional shift that can occur with depression.

However, the poem could benefit from a more varied and complex use of language. The use of clichés such as 'dark clouds looming' and 'the sun barely shines' may detract from the overall impact of the poem, as these phrases are often overused in discussions of depression.

The poem also seems to rely heavily on negative imagery and language, which can be effective in conveying the experience of depression, but may also limit the poem's ability to fully explore the complexity and nuance of this experience. Incorporating more varied and unexpected imagery could help to deepen the poem's exploration of its subject matter.

The poem's structure is consistent, with four lines per stanza, but the rhythm and meter of the poem could be improved. The inconsistent syllable count and stress pattern within and between stanzas can make the poem feel disjointed and may disrupt the reader's engagement with the poem.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more developed narrative or thematic arc. While the poem effectively communicates the experience of depression, it does not seem to progress beyond this initial depiction. Developing a narrative or thematic arc could help to engage the reader and provide a more nuanced exploration of the poem's subject matter.

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Hello, Carrie,
Well written. It feels like you have precisely described living with depression.
Thank you!
Lx

You did what I could not. Thinking back I just couldn't make poetry out of it, just some mumbling narration although it ran some 5 years.
Yes it is a bad adventure but ya meet some pretty cool folks along the way. It is strange and unfortunate how it takes so long to find a way out.
Best of luck in the competition,
xxoo

Great piece of work, very descriptive kind of hurts a bit because I've been there and know how it feels!