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Brain teaser

Submitted by Triskelion on Fri, 2024-01-12 10:50

The cannon coughed
Depleted uranium squealed
Through the sounder

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words: 
A teaser to get your creative juices flowing..can you offer ideas what this could be about? Don't be dismissive or shy. I want to hear all interpretations! Cheers!
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2024-01-12 12:05

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I told my squeeze about this entry of yours, because he likes this sort of thing and is usually quite good at them. I hope you hear from (Steven) soon.

*hugs, Cat

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-01-12 13:32

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Hello, Thomas,
I really am baffled, but wonder if your cleverness is hidden in the title. Perhaps a medical procedure? I will be back after others respond.
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Geezer

Fri, 2024-01-12 13:36

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as though, an artillery piece is firing depleted uranium shells at an enemy. These shells being denser and of more weight are much more destructive than other types of shells, but often thought of by the ignorant, to have radioactive properties and hence the "squeal" as they are supposedly imparting some "bad news". ~ Geez.
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Unca Fez

Thu, 2024-01-18 15:48

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DU is, typically, used in anti-tank rounds. There are rounds that are aimed directly at the tank. There are others that are classified as "top attack" that are fired over the target. These have a sensor of some time that will fire a warhead at the top of the tank as it passes over. This warhead is usually DU and creates what is called a self-forging fragment when fired. The SFF is traveling at high speed and is designed to punch through the tank's armor. The real damage, however, occurs inside the tank. The SFF and the molten metal from the tank generated by the SFF penetration (spall) rattles around inside the tank, killing the occupants. The squeal could be their dying screams over the radio.

Thanx,
Steve

Triskelion

Wed, 2024-01-17 18:26

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...I was hoping to get more bites on this and then offer it over to the ai to compare genetic imagination to the "library" ...at least I hope ai doesn't end up ruling literary critique over human laziness or complacency.
Come on guys...step it up!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-01-18 17:22

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it could be about having sex. ~ Geez.
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Triskelion

Sun, 2024-01-28 05:21

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...interpretations, guys. I think I'll put this experiment to bed for the time being. Perhaps more responses will waken it later.
Apologies where expected. Thanks.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

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