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Rhymes with Orange
he sat on a gold coloured shitter
not "X"ing on "Formerly Twitter"
and perplexed, we expect
that a "tweet" is an "X"
sadly vexed with the hex of a quitter!
(next turn...)
his face never graced "TwitterX"
'til his pride became rifled with wrecks
now the platform's O.K.
for his legal dismay
as he brays for your credit or cheques!
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
...just thinking stupid stuff waiting for my wife... wrote a limerick.
All in fun, of course!
Update...dang, I need to stop watching the news...
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Lake Simcoe Canada
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Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-08-13 11:38
This
This was funny. I need a little silliness today. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Triskelion
Sun, 2023-08-13 15:31
Thank you
RoseBlack. I'm glad to have brought some silliness to lighten your day!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentObadiah Grey
Sun, 2023-08-13 12:12
Oh,, God bless ya, Thomas !!
Oh,, God bless ya, Thomas !!
Brilliant !!!!!!!
Obi.
Triskelion
Sun, 2023-08-13 15:36
Hey Obi...
..glad this tickled your fancy...funny the stuff people can think up when we're bored. All that subconscious clatter rises like a turd sometimes! Sorta like politicians and their ilk.lol
Cheers!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentRuby Lord
Sun, 2023-08-13 14:01
Loved it, very funny, and
Loved it, very funny, and about as childish as X. Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Triskelion
Sun, 2023-08-13 15:39
Hi Ruby..
...I was hoping it would come to good use. You just confirmed that. Thank you!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentLavender
Sun, 2023-08-13 20:46
Rhymes With Orange
Hello, Thomas!
Just when I finally figured out what "Twitter" and "Tweet" meant!
I agree with Obi...brilliant!
L
Triskelion
Mon, 2023-08-14 08:31
Hi Lavender
..and thanks for reading and commenting. The limerick is my favourite form because of its simple and unique rules that dictates conservation and of course, fun!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentLavender
Sat, 2023-08-26 10:55
Hello, Thomas,
Your added limerick seals the title. So good. I need to stop watching the news, too.
L
Triskelion
Sun, 2023-08-27 10:01
Hi Lavender
..and thanks again. I don't really like being fixated to news in general, but I always seem to expect to find something that restores just a little bit of confidence in the decency in humanity...seems it's usually something you need to look for in other situations. Maybe that's one reason I come here.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
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