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Ol' Yeller and the Coyote

Ol' yeller was gettin' on in years
His jowls were saggy'n'so were his ears
There came'a'one day a friendly ky-yote
A'teasin an' rowin' an'a' gittin'is goat

Ol' yeller was confident, ever-one knew
To some, he was loyal 'n' royally blue
An'e held up our house for the years he was there
So, now this ky-yote comes, but he ain't a'scared

Says the ky-yote "I got somethin' you oughta see"
An yeller still layin', thinks what it could be
"If ya give up yer fam'ly, we'll take you aboard,
my crew is a'waitin, just a'yonder the ford."

An' the ky-yote keeps givin' Ol' yeller a pitch
an'e grins after hintin' he's sure t'git rich
an' badgers Ol' yeller to pull up 'is stake
'cuz freedom that's freest is freedom to take

N'ol' yeller gits randy and props up his bones
Ol' yeller don't know it, but ky-yotes are sly
An'is old yeller face turns away from his home
With contempt n'a growl an'n insolent eye

An'e goes...

It was later that ev'nin' that dog met 'is fate
But this yarn is a farce. It's a tell 'o' man's trait.

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Structured: Western
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Just a reaction to a ponderance of busting myths. Any help improving would be appreciated! Cheers! Edit- added a stanza and changed some wording.
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Hello, Thomas,
Great job with the vernacular, and I like the language throughout. The moral here is deep and can be read in several ways, but it seems to me the poem speaks of mankind's sad, fickle loyalty. I'll be back.
L

...there is an old myth that coyotes will lure a domestic dog out into the forest where the rest of their "pack" will attack and kill the dog. The phenomena has been debunked, of course and the romantic notion is called out as projection of human traits onto animals. Sure, animals seem cruel, but probably not quite so creative as mankind's.
Vernacular...now there's a new word for me. Thanks for that.
I guess there can be a few interpretations for the piece, but I'll keep the intended one to myself for now.
Thanks for reading and commenting!

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

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