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Stay
Stay.
No one waits for you
Out in that cold night
Where blindness reigns.
Stay.
Tomorrow we can wake together
On a bed of elation,
Recounting this white night's
Magic
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What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Just throwing this out there for the sake of it. Any feedback is appreciated.
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Lake Simcoe Canada
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Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2023-12-08 05:57
hello,
Respite from the cold night and loneliness. Taking refuge where you find it, with someone who smooths your rough edges. That is my take on your poem. Very nice!
*Happy Holidays, Cat
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Triskelion
Fri, 2023-12-22 18:14
Thank you, Cat..
...I was just remembering some nights when I was young, how a snowstorm brought a certain comfort of being stranded with someone I wanted to get closer to. All the best to you and yours!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentRoseBlack
Fri, 2023-12-08 07:56
Short and sweet
I can hear my own thoughts echoed in your words....all I want is for someone to stay...well done.
~RoseBlack~
Triskelion
Fri, 2023-12-22 18:16
Sometimes..
..unexpected weather activity can be a blessing. Cheers RoseBlack and holiday greetings!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentObadiah Grey
Fri, 2023-12-08 11:09
Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,
Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,
Pull my vest down when you're done,Thomas.
I like these "shorts", usually written off the cuff so to speak, they either work or don't,
I particularly like the latter half of this, though, enjoyed the whole.
Obi.
Triskelion
Fri, 2023-12-22 18:21
Hehehehe...
..only if I'm blackout drunk.. It's funny how a simple idea can write itself out in moments. Not much in the way of snow yet in my neighbourhood, but maybe I'll look for you next storm.
Cheers Obi!
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
author commentLavender
Tue, 2023-12-12 10:03
Stay
Hello, Thomas,
Pure romance...
L
Triskelion
Fri, 2023-12-22 18:23
That is..
..a sweet, simple reply that says it all. All the best to you and yours this holiday season. Thank you, Lavender.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
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