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Deep
Lone ears hear no love
The heart weeps in sad refrains
Splinters in burned ash
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2023-02-14 23:51
I'm feeling...
this one! I thought I heard what you were saying the other night. Sorry if it's so. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-15 02:36
Thanks Gee
Valentine's Day is always a little downer for me and this year was no exception. Figured I would put it to a poem.
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-02-15 05:47
Should we play around?
Yes it’s true that deaf ears hear no tales. Check this-
Lone ears hear not love
The heart weeps in strained refrains
Splinters in burned ash
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-15 06:21
Hi Tim
I like this a lot. Especially the first line.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-02-15 06:43
dear Carrie,
I am so sorry for your situation, but it is true; a broken heart is fantastic inspiration to write with, as you have proven here,
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-15 07:52
Thank you Cat
It's ok though...I have written many good pieces as a result.
~RoseBlack~
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-15 10:35
Thank you Kat
Hope you had a wonderful Valentine's Day
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Wed, 2023-02-15 12:38
Deep
Hello, Carrie,
Concise description of pain, which I hope will soon move along and your love for writing will bring about words of positive love.
Take care,
L
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-15 13:35
Hi L
I am slowly working on it. One foot in front of the other...thank you for the comment
~RoseBlack~