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Deep

Submitted by RoseBlack on Tue, 2023-02-14 20:27

Lone ears hear no love
The heart weeps in sad refrains
Splinters in burned ash

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-14 23:51

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this one! I thought I heard what you were saying the other night. Sorry if it's so. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-15 02:36

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Valentine's Day is always a little downer for me and this year was no exception. Figured I would put it to a poem.

~RoseBlack~

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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2023-02-15 05:47

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Yes it’s true that deaf ears hear no tales. Check this-

Lone ears hear not love
The heart weeps in strained refrains
Splinters in burned ash

RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-15 06:21

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I like this a lot. Especially the first line.

~RoseBlack~

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2023-02-15 06:43

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I am so sorry for your situation, but it is true; a broken heart is fantastic inspiration to write with, as you have proven here,

*hugs, Cat

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-15 07:52

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It's ok though...I have written many good pieces as a result.

~RoseBlack~

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-15 10:35

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Hope you had a wonderful Valentine's Day

~RoseBlack~

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-02-15 12:38

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Hello, Carrie,
Concise description of pain, which I hope will soon move along and your love for writing will bring about words of positive love.
Take care,
L

RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-15 13:35

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I am slowly working on it. One foot in front of the other...thank you for the comment

~RoseBlack~

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