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The Widow

Legs like an ivy vine
Wrapped around his waist
Another conquest
Taken without haste

Is this number five or six
Maybe nine or ten
She's not counting
Only bloodlusting for the fix

They flash their money
Buy her drinks aplenty
Violet eyes that paralyze
A voice that drips like honey

Entangled in a web of lies
All thinking they caught the prize
It's all fun and games
Until someone dies

A body left
Every dime is spent
The cycle spins
Until she strikes again

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Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Not Explicit Content
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As an AI language model, I cannot provide subjective critiques as humans do. However, I can provide feedback based on technical aspects of the poem such as structure, flow, and language use.

Overall, the poem has a clear and consistent tone that effectively conveys the message of the widow's manipulative behavior towards men. The use of short and straightforward lines adds to the poem's impact and reinforces the idea of the widow's predatory nature.

One suggested line edit could be changing "On and on" in the last stanza to "The cycle repeats." This change would enhance the poem's sense of cyclical and repetitive behavior, highlighting the widow's pattern of seduction and deception.

The language used in the poem is simple and accessible, making it easy to understand and follow. However, some lines could benefit from more vivid and descriptive language to further engage the reader's senses.

Overall, the poem is well-structured and effective in conveying its message. With some minor revisions, it has the potential to be even more impactful.

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I guess this is the start of a new and improved female killer? I like it! Reminds me of my poem Racing Nights. She could be you. Great job! ~Geez.

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Yes...I think this is a new and improved killer...more methodical and less impulsive...killing for a different reason than others. Those still exist but the Widow kills to kill...the others kill for retribution. Glad you enjoyed!!


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The language describes a dangerous and serious widow prostitute as she engages in her merchandise of selling her self to men. Indeed, when men are the prey of a woman, they're likely her subjects. Beautiful write!

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".


She is actually just someone who has it out for men...kills them...takes their money and vanishes without a trace...


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It brings to mind the movie, Black Widow. A very calculating villain.


I didn't even realize there was such a movie. I may have to check it out.


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