The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, "A Strange Story," presents a vivid narrative with a strong emotional undercurrent. It uses descriptive language effectively to transport the reader into the scenes it presents. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Consistency in Tense: The poem switches between past and present tense, which can be disorienting for the reader. For example, "Saw an old lady knitting on the metro today" is in past tense, while "I am not talking about glaucoma white" is in present tense. Maintaining a consistent tense throughout the poem could help improve the flow and readability.

2. Punctuation: The poem lacks consistent punctuation, which can make it difficult to understand the intended rhythm and pauses. Adding punctuation could help clarify the intended reading of the poem.

3. Imagery and Metaphor: While the poem uses strong imagery and metaphor, some of the descriptions could be refined for clarity. For example, "my skin turned to the ugliest savage kind of white I ever seen in my life, and it started peeling away" could be more effectively conveyed with more precise language.

4. Structure: The poem could benefit from a more consistent structure. The lines vary significantly in length and rhythm, which can disrupt the flow of the poem. Consider revising the poem to create a more consistent rhythm and line length.

5. Show, Don't Tell: The poem often tells the reader what is happening rather than showing it through imagery and metaphor. For example, "I was transported to a different time" could be shown through the images and sensations of the time period rather than directly stated.

6. Clarity of Message: The poem's message could be made clearer. While the poem presents a series of vivid scenes, it's not always clear how these scenes connect to each other or what overall message they are intended to convey. Consider revising the poem to clarify its overarching theme or message.

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to be a nightmare, and quite a strange story indeed.
I would suggest that you try to puzzle it out and figure out what the meaning is.
I am a great believer in dreams, not so much as a prophesy or portend, as much as
I think that dreams are the sub-conscious mind trying to get in touch with the concious.
Your sub-conscious is trying hard to tell you about something.

There are a few things I think need addressing; [tousling] refers to something done with
a person's hair nothing to do with chains.

[Ruffled] so small? Again, ruffled pertains to hair, or something blowing, brushing through one's hair or a sheaf of grass.

[Curdling] should be used with a subject like milk, blood or some liquid that lumps and clots.

Your language use is fair, but you need to research unfamiliar words.
The theme is certainly right on, as far as strange stories go.
The beginning captured my attention right away, and the ending was as mysterious as the beginning.
Of course, the logic is not there, as it is a strange story.
Other than the use of unfamilair words, you did a good job. ~ Geezer.
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