The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem is quite intense and deals with heavy themes of abuse and family dysfunction. The narrative is clear and the emotions are raw, which can be very impactful for readers. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

1. Consistency in Structure: The poem seems to follow a loose structure of six lines per stanza, but this is not maintained consistently. For example, the final stanza has seven lines. Consistency in structure can help to create a rhythm and flow that can enhance the overall impact of the poem.

2. Use of Repetition: Repetition is used effectively in some parts of the poem, such as the repeated line "Twisted thoughts that should never be". However, in other parts, the repetition seems less purposeful and more redundant, such as the repeated use of "my eyes" in the first stanza. It might be beneficial to consider where repetition can be used most effectively to emphasize key points or emotions.

3. Show, Don't Tell: The poem tells the reader directly about the abuse and trauma the speaker has experienced. While this directness can be powerful, it might also be worth considering how to show these experiences more subtly through imagery, metaphor, or other poetic devices. This can create a more nuanced and layered understanding of the speaker's experiences.

4. Language and Tone: The language and tone of the poem are quite raw and direct. While this can be effective in conveying the speaker's pain and anger, it might also be worth considering how to use more varied language and tone to create a more complex emotional landscape. This could include moments of tenderness, regret, or longing, for example, to contrast with the anger and pain.

5. Punctuation: The poem lacks consistent punctuation, which can make it difficult for readers to follow the intended rhythm and emphasis of the lines. Adding punctuation can help to guide the reader through the poem and enhance its overall impact.

6. Trigger Warning: It's commendable that a trigger warning was included given the heavy themes of the poem. However, it might be beneficial to be more specific about the nature of the triggers (e.g., child abuse, sexual abuse) to give readers a clearer idea of what to expect.

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Oh, Carrie,
So very haunting. I can hear the different voices and feel all the different emotions. This must have been a very hard piece to write, but you've done well. It is extremely powerful.
L

Powerful stuff. Ignore AI it is just an unfeeling machine. Nothing more I can say except this is the most powerful piece I have read on here. Alex

Your poem is so powerful. Now you hold all the power in your words. Take care and stay safe, Ruby :) xx

must still be excruciating to live through... I hope scars one day heal enough to be bearable...

much sympathy and compassion...

A.P.

Why is it that often the harder it is to write a poem the more power it has. I hope the object of this poem stays far from you