The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Revised Bucket List" exhibits a clear narrative structure and a thoughtful exploration of the themes of aging, change, and the importance of love and connection. The use of a bucket list as a metaphor for life's goals is effective and relatable.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The rhythm and meter are inconsistent, which can disrupt the flow for the reader. For example, the line "A formidable list, indeed" is shorter than the surrounding lines, which can create a jarring effect. It would be beneficial to revise the poem to ensure a more consistent rhythm.

The language used is straightforward and accessible, but it lacks the use of vivid, concrete imagery that could make the poem more engaging and memorable. For example, instead of saying "To lift them up as high above/The mundane as I can, and teach", the poet could use specific images or actions to show what this looks like.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its themes. It presents a very positive view of aging and change, but it might be more interesting and realistic if it also acknowledged the challenges or mixed feelings that can come with these experiences.

Overall, the poem has a strong foundation and a clear message, but could be improved with more attention to rhythm, imagery, and complexity of theme.

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I really felt this one, it brought to mind the passing of a friend two years ago.
In the last couple of months, he started doing projects that he had only talked about.
I asked why now? He said that; "I want to leave my mark on this world, with something that will endure for a while."
When I am gone, someone else will live here, and I want them to see that I cared about this place."

I like the title, your language use is good.
Your theme is bright and cheerful, rather than sober with the realization that you've had to revise the list.
Your rhyme and near rhyme is consistently good, [I didn't have to back up and look closer at the rhyme, even though the words
didn't match exactly.] I like when that happens.

The only place that I see needing any improvement, [in my opinon] is

"But years have passed, goals have changed, too,"

Could be streamlined and still get the idea across.

But years have passed, and goals change too.

~ Geez.
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Hello, Mary Beth,
This has a lovely energy and flow. Beautiful language and theme throughout. I especially like the last two lines - a nice feeling and wrap-up of the entire poem.
Thank you!
L