The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, "Abandoned," demonstrates a strong narrative arc, which effectively engages the reader's interest. The use of rhyme and rhythm is consistent throughout, providing a pleasing auditory experience when read aloud.

The poem could benefit from more precise and evocative language. For instance, the phrase "gave me a feeling of dark doom" could be reworked to provide a more specific image or sensation. What does "dark doom" look like, feel like, or sound like?

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. For instance, "What had he done in dark of night? Was he convicted by dawn's light?" These lines tell the reader what to think, rather than showing them through imagery or action. The poem could be improved by replacing such instances with more descriptive language.

The narrative could be clearer. The poem starts with the image of an abandoned boat, then shifts to the discovery of a body. The relationship between these two elements is not entirely clear. Is the body related to the boat? If so, how? The poem could benefit from more explicit connections between its different elements.

The ending of the poem is somewhat abrupt. The line "I only know I lost him there" concludes the narrative but does not provide a satisfying resolution. The poem might be improved by adding more lines to provide a more detailed or emotional conclusion.

Overall, the poem demonstrates a good understanding of rhyme and rhythm, and a promising narrative. With more precise language, stronger imagery, clearer connections, and a more satisfying conclusion, it could be even more effective.

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Hello, Mary Beth,
So much here, especially as the poem develops. The meaning is deep and solemn. A remarkable poem, but I can also imagine this in story form. It flows very well and the rhyme pattern is crisp. The title itself makes me assume there is more to the story, and that final line makes me feel desolate, circling around to the entire theme. Well written.
Thank you!
L

Very evocative piece. Don't take too much notice of AI. Of course he doesn't know what much that is written means, you have to be human to understand. I've almost stopped using him. Alex