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H8mongers Need Not Apply
Take your hate-filled rhetoric and hide under a rock with it.
We don't want you here
If you don't have a willingness to help build.
Take your emotional demolition derby elsewhere.
I will not drink the purple Kool-Aid
You offer so loudly.
I will not sip at your fountain of hate.
Until you can teach love,
You have no lesson to share.
Until you can share an uplifting message,
I will not hear your words.
True leaders do not destroy,
They construct good things for their followers.
Liars depend on half-truths and misrepresentations to make their case.
The louder the harangue, the greater the falsehood.
Go peddle your hateful lies to weaklings.
I am strong enough to stand without you and against you.
I will not hate on your say-so.
H8mongers need not apply to lead my world.
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neopoet
Sun, 2024-06-23 18:30
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "H8mongers Need Not Apply" presents a strong voice against hate and falsehood. The use of direct language and clear imagery effectively conveys the speaker's stance. However, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced approach to its subject matter.
The poem's strength lies in its directness and clarity. The speaker's refusal to participate in hate and lies is clearly and forcefully expressed. The use of phrases like "emotional demolition derby" and "purple Kool-Aid" adds a vivid and imaginative dimension to the poem.
However, the poem's approach to its subject matter could be more nuanced. The speaker's stance against hate and lies is clear, but the poem does not explore the complexities of these issues. For example, it could delve into why people resort to hate and lies, or how these negative forces can be overcome.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from more varied language and structure. The repeated use of the phrase "I will not" can become monotonous, and the poem's structure is fairly uniform throughout. Varying the language and structure could make the poem more engaging and dynamic.
Lastly, the poem's ending could be more impactful. The final line, "H8mongers need not apply to lead my world," is a strong statement, but it could be more powerful if it were built up to more effectively. This could be achieved by intensifying the language and imagery leading up to the final line, or by introducing a twist or revelation at the end.
In conclusion, while the poem effectively conveys a strong stance against hate and lies, it could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its subject matter, more varied language and structure, and a more impactful ending.
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kowque
Fri, 2024-06-28 15:48
The truth and hate is so palpable
Koki
kowque
Fri, 2024-06-28 15:49
The truth and hate is so palpable
Koki
Candlewitch
Fri, 2024-06-28 16:11
Dear Mary Beth,
Steven and I just watched the U.S. Presidential Debate (which we recorded) and witnessed both hate and indifference. I will not go into my personal opinions, here. I will only say that hate has no place in this business. thank you for sharing your thought provoking poem with us.
*hugs, Cat
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