The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Mistress in the Closet" demonstrates a strong command of imagery and metaphor, which are effectively used to create a vivid portrayal of the central character. The transition from the initial perception of the 'Mistress' as a perfumed breeze to the final revelation of her as a 'Demonness straight from Hell' is well-executed, providing a satisfying narrative arc.

However, the poem could benefit from a more careful use of language and rhythm. Some lines, such as 'I thought I have her as captive' and 'daydreams constant and forever', seem to disrupt the flow of the poem due to their awkward phrasing. It is suggested to revise these lines for smoother readability.

Additionally, the poem might benefit from a deeper exploration of the speaker's emotional journey. While the speaker's infatuation and subsequent disillusionment are clear, the poem could provide more insight into the speaker's feelings and reactions to these changes. This could add an additional layer of complexity and emotional depth to the poem.

Lastly, the poem's conclusion might be considered somewhat abrupt. The transition from the speaker's realization of the 'Mistress' true nature to the final line could be more gradual, allowing the reader to fully appreciate the impact of this revelation. This could be achieved by adding more lines or stanzas to build up to the final revelation.

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Just wreaks of forbidden, toxic love and how we believe someone until their mask falls off. I love the intensity. Great job.

This was really good Cat. My favourite lines:
somehow she bewitches me into believing
that I am her reason for breathing.
I love the way these two rhyme and your alliteration is especially effective here.
Great job, Ruby :) xx