The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem presents a narrative that is both engaging and emotionally charged. The use of rhyme and rhythm is consistent throughout the piece, contributing to its overall flow. However, there are areas where the narrative could be clearer and the language more precise.

The poem's narrative, which seems to revolve around a traumatic event and its aftermath, is somewhat obscured by ambiguity. While it is clear that something terrible happens to Simone, the exact nature of the event is not fully explained. This may be an intentional choice to leave the reader with a sense of unease, but it could also lead to confusion.

The language used throughout the poem is generally effective in conveying the emotional tone of the piece. However, there are instances where the choice of words could be more precise. For example, in the line "Music tuned in, she glided free," the phrase "tuned in" is a bit vague. A more specific phrase could provide a clearer image of Simone's actions and emotions.

The poem's structure is consistent, with each stanza containing four lines. This provides a solid framework for the narrative. However, the rhythm of the poem is occasionally disrupted by lines that are noticeably longer or shorter than others. Maintaining a consistent rhythm could improve the poem's flow.

The poem's conclusion, in which Simone is described as dancing on broken glass, is a powerful image that effectively conveys her resilience. However, the phrase "but don't dis it till you try" seems out of place in the context of the poem's serious tone. A more fitting conclusion might maintain the serious tone while still emphasizing Simone's strength and determination.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional impact and presents a compelling narrative. With some adjustments to clarify the narrative and refine the language, it could be even more effective.

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Hello, Eddy,
This is one of your best - dark and disgustingly creepy, but so heartbreaking. I feel her pain, or apathy toward pain, so acutely.
Thank you,
Lx

I might not be a fan of eddy's type of poetry. I think it's not an easy thing to write dark poetry. I've tried it so many times and can't remember how many were successful.
Back to this one, I think tou did great in keeping me indulged in reading till the very last line.
Scary it is.

This is a very engaging backstory to the original "Broken Glass". Throughout, it keeps the reader's interest. My only change would be to the first line of the 2nd verse: Change "verses" to "versus".