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The poem "Broken Glass" exhibits a clear narrative and vivid imagery, which effectively conveys the story of the dancer on the streets. The use of details such as "dark paved streets," "music in her soul," and "dancing on broken glass" paints a poignant picture of the protagonist's life and circumstances.

However, the poem could benefit from more nuanced language and varied sentence structure. The use of more complex metaphors or similes could add depth to the imagery and make the poem more engaging. For example, instead of saying "she had music in her soul," perhaps consider a metaphor that conveys this idea in a more unique way.

The line "Alarmed, a child pointed out;" seems to disrupt the rhythm of the poem, as it is a bit longer and more complex than the surrounding lines. Consider revising this line to maintain the poem's rhythm and flow.

The note about 'eddy styx' being a male alter ego who writes dark poetry could potentially be integrated into the poem itself, perhaps as a footnote or an epigraph, to provide context without breaking the fourth wall.

Lastly, the poem could explore the character of the dancer more deeply. As it stands, the reader learns about her actions, but not much about her thoughts, feelings, or motivations. Providing more insight into her character could make the poem more emotionally resonant.

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Hello, Eddy,
I felt the determination in this to feel joy in life, no matter where we are, or what life hands over to us. I also have a lot of questions about this individual, but wonder if I'd be missing the point to think too deeply about her. I'll wait for your response, and just leave her alone - seemingly content to dance.
Thank you!
Lx

I can't imagine I could give her a name - you know her soooo well. It does feel like, the more I read your poem, the more powerful, yet delicate she becomes. I'll be back to catch what you decide!
Lx

I feel this woman's pain is so deep, she can't feel the glass cutting her feet. Numbness is a horrible side effect. I get the feeling she is transient due to the streets being her preferred stage. So dark and mysterious. Well done, eddy

I am always intrigued by the life of a transient. I found the character portrayed to be sensitive and sweet. We all can learn and
gain more compassion, after all we too might end up on the street.

I like the general flow and pictures portrayed within the piece the final line is very strong. I feel it’s integral to end with a punch and you’ve done this like a bullet from a gun (and I mean that in a very good way) many of my poems I interchange between male and female characters. Or completely from a female point of view. Your Eddie Styx surely does help you to work through the darker side of your character. Of course all interesting people have a dark side and if it’s a source of catharsis for you I’m pleased to be a fellow traveller in your path toward healing and precious redemption thanks for allowing me to read this

mindful that there are people out there who dance on broken glass,
barbed wire, sharp coral and hot pavement!
Funny, but they all seem to be in different places, not of this Earth.
I guess that there are infinite places, as many as there are people.
This is one of your best eddy!
You bring this girl into focus and make her live. I would love to see where this girl winds up,
maybe she gets home, maybe she doesn't. Maybe eddy, you can follow her?
Just to make sure she comes to no harm, of course.
Nicely done. ~ Geez.
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Congratulations on your winning the weekly poetry contest. I agree with Geezer: This is one of eddy's best.