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Love Letter To The Sky

Wrap me in blankets of cloudy wonder
Heal my soul by moon's effervescent light
Cradle my insecurities
Hear my plight

Exhausted from fighting too many wars
Let my spirit float between the planets
Holding on to the tail of a comet
Lulling me to sleep amongst the stars

Kiss me with hope
For the taste of love's poison lingers
Restore my faith
Give me reason to cope

Catch me as I'm falling
Back to the world below
Safely within your grasp
I'm not ready to let go

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The poem "Love Letter To The Sky" presents a vivid and engaging exploration of the speaker's yearning for escape and healing. The use of celestial imagery throughout the poem effectively conveys the speaker's desire for freedom and peace. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from more specific and concrete imagery. While the celestial metaphors are compelling, they could be grounded in more tangible experiences or objects to create a stronger connection with the reader. For instance, instead of saying "Wrap me in blankets of cloudy wonder," the poem could describe the specific sensations or emotions associated with being wrapped in these metaphorical blankets.

Secondly, the poem's rhythm and meter could be more consistent. The poem seems to be written in free verse, but there are places where it veers towards a more structured form. This inconsistency can be distracting for the reader. If the intention is to write in free verse, then the poem could benefit from a more deliberate use of line breaks and white space to control the poem's pace and rhythm.

Lastly, the poem could delve deeper into the speaker's emotional journey. The poem touches on themes of pain, healing, and freedom, but these themes could be explored in more depth. The poem could provide more insight into the speaker's past experiences and how they have shaped their current state of mind. This would add more emotional depth to the poem and make the speaker's longing for escape and healing more poignant.

Overall, "Love Letter To The Sky" is a promising poem that could be strengthened with more specific imagery, consistent rhythm, and deeper emotional exploration.

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Your poem is wrapped in pictures that stand out clearly. It gave me a sense of hope and comfort within your words. I enjoyed the sense of movement in the verses:
Catch me as I'm falling, and in the second stanza: Holding on to the tail of a comet
Beautiful and vivid imagery, I enjoyed this one very much. Ruby :)

Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.

I wasn't sure what was going to materialize when I started this and reworked it a couple of times since. I am glad you enjoyed and found beauty in my words. Thank you!


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I love the metaphysical references to love and the experience of it.
The hope of respite from the war of relationships by way of floating off to a meeting
in the sky with the light from the moon lighting the way, makes the reader want to stay there forever.
Kissing one with hope may sweeten the soul and rescue it from the poisonous effects of love gone bad.
I enjoyed this flight of fancy, as it gives the reader a reason to go on when facing the difficulties of relationships.

I do not see any reason to change the form or get into the personal reasons for this flight of fancy.
It is enough that the writer chooses to make the journey.
Nicely done ~ Geez.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I am glad you enjoyed the journey. A bit of an escape as a coping mechanisms. I reworked this a couple of times since submitting last night. I am glad you liked it and the meaning was clear. I am also glad the imagery fit the narrative. Thank you.


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Your imagery really connects the sky, clouds and your feelings. I think this is a really good poem .
Thank you

I am glad you were able to connect and enjoyed. Thank you for the comment and read.


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Hello, Carrie,
"Kiss me with hope." What a beautiful request! I felt the surrender throughout, and the serenity - the second stanza is full of magic. Thank you for sharing this tender love poem.

This poem turned into a personal request for respite and the need for hope and peace. Thank you for reading and feeling the deepest meaning of the poem.


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