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A grizzled grazed grin

Submitted by Edward nigma on Fri, 2023-07-07 08:00

A Grizzled Grazed
grin gradually
growing back
into that
Innocently insecure
soul. Who once
heedfully hemmed
his half hummed
hopes within
the wistfully
withering
waters of
wonderment .

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-07-07 15:47

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sometimes, we regret the time spent in ignorance, but when we realize our innocence gone...
Your alliteration is first rate! Nicely done.
~ Geez.
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Lavender

Fri, 2023-07-07 15:53

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Hello, Edward,
I agree with Geezer.
Well done!
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Edward nigma

Fri, 2023-07-07 19:42

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I was inspired by the Harry Chapin song the same sad singer which painted an image of meeting a old friend seeing that they’re to say something and apologize but all you’re left with is silence.

https://youtu.be/jTJIpbHnRMM

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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