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Faintly falling feet

Submitted by Edward nigma on Fri, 2023-08-25 21:08

Faintly falling
feet strictly
strolling
from street
to street .
Wistfully
wandering while
persistently pondering
past the
people they meet.

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No I don’t know about you people interpret anything any which way , and as a creator you always have to accept that ? I might be talking nonsense right know that just because right my head head , is in pain right now, and I’m just trying keep focus . anyway I’m sorry for the long long pause or absence . It’s just a lot of stuff has happened to me lately and my health has not been doing to good.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-08-25 22:31

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I hope you're feeling better soon. One word, [passed] should be [past]. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Sat, 2023-08-26 11:07

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Hello, Edward,
This is dream-like and actually has a wonderful rhyme pattern to it when read aloud. Thanks for sharing your unique gift. I hope your pain subsides. Take care.
Much love,
L

Edward nigma

Sat, 2023-08-26 11:57

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Well I was inspired by a review of the graduate . First and foremost I see this poem as when I wrote it is about growing up . for when you’re growing up your drifting aimlessly from one moment to the next. Always at the beginning thinking about the future so much you forget what is actually in front of you.

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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