The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses alliteration and assonance to create a rhythmic flow, which enhances the reading experience. However, the meaning and theme could be made clearer. The use of abstract concepts such as 'passage of time', 'element', and 'turning the tide' are intriguing but may leave readers uncertain about the poem's message.

The poem could benefit from more concrete imagery or specific details to ground these abstract concepts. For example, instead of 'passage of time', the poet could use a specific event or image that symbolizes the passage of time.

The structure of the poem also seems inconsistent. The lines vary in length and the poem does not follow a specific rhyme scheme or meter. While free verse can be effective, in this case, a more consistent structure might help to convey the poem's theme more clearly.

Lastly, the use of punctuation is inconsistent. Some lines end with a period, others with a space, and some with no punctuation at all. Consistent punctuation can help guide the reader through the poem and clarify the intended pauses and stops.

Overall, while the poem has potential, it could benefit from clearer imagery, a more consistent structure, and consistent punctuation.

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Hello, Dear Edward,
The video inspiration you used is almost as inspiring as you. Your poetry is so moving, and your alliteration is still fantastic. Keep writing when you can!
Much love,
L / D