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The End of Genesis
About six thousand years ago
The sun didn’t shine and the moon didn’t glow
But now there’s a race on mobile phones
What the future holds, nobody knows
We know where we are but we don’t know why
We’re amazed as we gaze at the moonlit sky
A sense of wonder and a sense of fear
So, we mask our pain with God-given beer
About two thousand years ago
Jesus came with a crown, but had no throne
It was made of thorns not made of gold
Since those days, the myths been told
About four-hundred years ago
The crowd grew wise and the story got old
The race progressed, it’s the after glow
From the bang that was big, yes now we know!
Last few words:
There may be some Christians on this site but i doubt most are.
Basically this is about the evolution of wisdom from believing an old book to still not knowing everything, but knowing a bit more, or the progress of science / the human race
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Thu, 2023-08-31 18:21
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RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-08-31 20:43
Evolution
Something that has been occuring since the beginning of time, long before there was ever a book. This was well written, descriptive and tastefully done. Good job.
~RoseBlack~