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1 of 88 A.I: Alcoholic Indulgence / Artificially Intelligence: Drinking isn't smart
Alcohol abuse attracts boredom in abundance
A bonified abandonment of all that amounts to ‘being’
Clarifying clearly what’s certainly the culprit of
Detonating delirious dreams: it delves deep under skin
The devil is the drink, and if you drink you will sink
Life will eventually end – evade what seems ecstatic
Loyal friends; family, fragile fortuitous times
Gin-soaked jeans; guilt, and ghastly nightly girls
Hating what’s horrendous; the half-heartfelt held-hands
Heading to hotels, with heinous hyena-like humans
Interspersed with icy-cold interests, incorporated with
The incapacity to think independently: insidious inaptitude;
Juxtaposed journeys: joyous jollies: jousting with the devil just because…
Killing the conditions to collaborate with kinship, will bring to your knees
Knowing that not all will knit together: the knowledge of uncertainty
Learning from mistakes when the path that you take is fake
Leaning on other’s who’re so drunk, they can’t stand up
Licked minds think alike: stick with what you know and who you trust
Lending money to a stranger, because you feel his lonely pain
Leaving lovers to linger: lengthy journeys home in laughably leafy suburbs
After loving ladies with lots more than a lengthy finger
Making money momentarily, just to go to many pubs
Perusing the impossible: a swamp that isn’t fallible
A reality that’s so surreal it makes one question life itself
Really regretting reasons listed above, up from ‘R’
Rapidly reducing health and reaping the readily available red districts:
Get your readies ready, and get ready to regret an empty wallet
Singing in the rain, because the alternative is tears
Sending SMS to people to be sociable after several strong steins
Timing everything to a ‘T’, to tempt fate and tease your brain ten times squared
Upside-down logic, on the wrong side of life:
Understating alphabetical order but still stopping at ‘U’.
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Thu, 2023-12-07 09:20
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem effectively uses alliteration and a consistent alphabetical structure to create a rhythm and flow. However, the meaning can sometimes become obscured by the strict adherence to this structure. The poem might benefit from a more flexible approach to the alphabetical order, allowing for a clearer narrative or message to come through.
The use of personification, particularly in lines such as "Detonating delirious dreams: it delves deep under skin" and "The devil is the drink, and if you drink you will sink", is effective in giving abstract concepts a tangible presence. However, the imagery can sometimes be confusing. For example, "gin-soaked jeans" and "ghastly nightly girls" are striking images but their connection to the overall theme of the poem is unclear.
The poem also uses a variety of tones, from the serious contemplation of alcohol abuse to the more light-hearted, almost humorous, descriptions of drunken behavior. This can make the poem feel disjointed. A more consistent tone might help to convey the poem's message more effectively.
The ending of the poem, "Understating alphabetical order but still stopping at ‘U’", is intriguing. It suggests a disruption to the established order, which could be seen as a metaphor for the effects of alcohol. However, this interpretation is not entirely clear, and the poem might benefit from further exploration of this idea.
Overall, this poem has a strong structure and uses interesting language and imagery. With some refinement to clarify its message and create a more consistent tone, it could be even more impactful.
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