The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Title: Behind The Mask

The poem seems to be exploring the theme of deception, hidden intentions, and the darker side of human nature. The imagery and language used effectively convey the sinister and malicious aspects of the subject matter. However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from further development and refinement.

1. Imagery and metaphors: The poem uses strong imagery and metaphors, such as "venom filled fangs," "tainted lips," and "crooked razor blades." These images are evocative and help to create a vivid picture of the subject. However, some of the metaphors could be more cohesive to create a more unified image. For example, the poem could benefit from focusing on a single metaphorical theme, such as the snake imagery in the first line, and developing it throughout the poem.

2. Structure and form: The poem's structure is relatively free-form, with varying line lengths and no consistent rhyme scheme. While this can be an effective choice for certain themes and styles, it may be worth experimenting with a more structured form to see if it enhances the poem's impact. For example, a consistent rhyme scheme or meter could help to emphasize the poem's message and create a more memorable reading experience.

3. Clarity and focus: The poem's theme of deception and hidden intentions is clear, but some lines could be refined to better convey the intended message. For example, the line "A narcissistic paradise" could be rephrased or expanded upon to more clearly connect it to the preceding lines and the overall theme of the poem. Additionally, the poem could benefit from a more focused exploration of the consequences of deception and the emotional toll it takes on both the deceiver and those being deceived.

4. Ending: The poem's ending, "Welcome to never ending hell," effectively conveys the sense of despair and suffering experienced by the poem's subjects. However, the ending could be strengthened by providing a more specific image or situation that encapsulates the poem's theme and leaves a lasting impression on the reader.

Overall, the poem effectively explores the darker side of human nature and the consequences of deception. By refining the imagery, structure, clarity, and ending, the poem has the potential to create a more powerful and memorable reading experience.

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I like the first four lines, or, particularly, lines three and four.

    Once gentle finger tips

    Twist into crooked razor blades

...I think you've accomplished a nice sound with these lines. I do wonder how I should be reading line three. Is it once-gentle finger tips—as if they aren't gentle anymore? Or is once being use as an adverb like as in when gentle finger tips twist...

In line ten, I'm also liking the combination narcisistic paradise. In the lines

    Behind closed doors

    It's fight or flight

    A narcisistic paradise

If you combine lines eight and nine, the lines (8+9, 10) would scan as iambic tetrameter.

The first two line of your third stanza are also almost iambic tetrameter. With a little re-working, it wouldn't be hard to get them there.

Overall, I think this could benefit from some more uniformity in terms of meter or rhyme.