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About You...
About You...
something in the way
you take my hand
caress my cheek
gaze into my eyes
breathe my name
kiss my throat
fondle my nape...
we undulate
oscillate
modulate
tangled limbs
of a work in progress
Something about you causes
my mouth to dry
breath to catch
pulse to race
body to sing...
The chorus
of the music of our souls
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2022-07-14 14:19
I love your title...
The story told is a one of love and unity with another. Excellent pace and word usage. ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-07-14 14:41
guess who I wrote it for? LOL
I'm listening to the guess who right now...
thank you for always being supportive of my work! you are a true friend!
*love & hugs, Cat
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Mr joghe
Thu, 2022-07-14 15:47
I love the title.
I love the title.
The poem is about two lovers that felt the warmth of their bodies when they were together.
"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 11:52
thank you Mr. Joghe,
you are right.
always, Cat
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Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-07-14 20:31
Title
It’s great. I’m late getting on tonight. But yeah!!
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 11:54
thanks Tim!
you don't mean to tell me, that you have a life outside of Neopoet? lol
*hugs, Cat
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RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-07-14 21:58
Love everything about this
The title, the flow, the story...all wonderful!
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 12:07
thank you RoseB. I appreciate
thank you RoseB. I appreciate your reading and commenting :)
*hugs, Cat
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Jackweb
Fri, 2022-07-15 06:12
Tender romantic poetry
and erotic love verse. Generally short and graceful in form and typically dealing with themes of love and affection.
Beautifully penned piece!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 12:09
thank you Onyinechi!
I appreciate your comments!
*hugs, Cat
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Seren
Mon, 2023-03-06 10:08
Dearest One
This reminded me of two souls dancing around each other an attracted like magnets. I think it is an absolute cracking poem. I love the title it suits the poem. I think this would make for some amazing lyrics!!!
Yep I went back in time again
Brava!!!
Love you always Lilbit xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-03-07 05:49
dearest Lilbit,
thank you for the sweetness in your comment. I always appreciate you because you are so kind.
*Love & hugs, Siscat
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scribbler
Mon, 2023-03-06 10:12
hi Cat.
this write manages to be sexual without being carnal. Well done
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-03-07 05:53
dear Stan,
you always see the good in everyone. it is a rare talent that you have! thank you,
*love, Cat
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